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Second boss by GreyHues Second boss by GreyHues
Character for a social activity event (LA2 related)
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Nice to meet you and thank you for sharing and taking the time to look at my critique! I hope that it is helpful for you.
The colors and light are very good on this piece. Feathers appear to be feathers, skin to be skin, and metal to be metal. The gems are also very nice and not overdone. Her expression is also perfect. Not stereotypically sumptuous - she's serious and maybe about to speak. She's confident.
My main points of critique lay with the torso, the spear, and the water crashing at the bottom. I'll start with the torso. For the strength of the shading under her ribs, as well as the thinness of her neck and arm, I'd expect her waistline to be thinner. Why not take it in a bit in the back. The thickness may also be coming from the very slight appearance of her left arm. It is actually so subtle that I didn't notice that it was her arm holding another spear. I recommend pulling her arm behind her torso completely and perhaps lifting the forearm with her second spear if you want to showcase it. Otherwise, I think she would look fine without it showing at all.
As for her skin, I can see some texture on her chest and shoulder, but I feel like it needs to be slightly strengthened and/or shown in more places, or not at all.
As for the spear, it doesn't seem to match her. That is, she's wearing beautiful fabrics and metals, but her spear is wooden and stone and simple. You might trade the leather-looking grip for a thin casing bit of that metal, or change the stone spear to glass or metal with metal fitting.
Finally, the water seems too powerful for her to be just standing there. If you added some lift to her wings, and her hair, kind of like they were billowing from wind coming from below, the energy would seem more believable. (Even taking in her waist at the back would giver her a more energetic pose.) Also, you could add some shadow-darkened water closer to the foreground and at the front/bottom of the frame. It would add depth and power at the same time, and tie into the shadows of the background. ;)
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RhysBriers Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
awesome work!
Tarzok Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
GreyHues Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Phong98 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Stunning artwork :D
GreyHues Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Rollie-Fola Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Totally thought this was morganna from League of Legends xD
Beautiful work :)
msmcoin Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
This is really magnificent. I love the range of shading from blue to green - even tints in her hair.Great detail work on the wings. I think on the larger outer wings you could have added lines to show the feathers, but they are beautiful. I think the fabric work and the detail on her belt are beautiful. And I agree the water is "insane" - great detail there! I would love to tell this story! I write a non-commercial daily creative-writing blog - may I include this image with credit to you and a link back to here? Best wishes, Margaret
GreyHues Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you)
oMuffins Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Woah, the wings are rendered beautifully. 
The abdominal area is also wonderfully colored and shaded.
He accessories and clothing are great, but some of the folds on her bottom piece are 
blended a bit too much. Makes it a bit difficult to understand its shape and the folds don't 
stand out (but that might be my monitor). Now the water... oh my the water is just insane.
It's evident that the water is in motion, and it's done spectacularly. 
I mean, water is really hard to render so, kudos to you.
Overall, 'tis a great composition and well drawn/colored piece. Great job!
GreyHues Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
oMuffins Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My pleasure. 
Kudos to you and that epic piece. :)
Vulpes94 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh i adore this kind of blue
FlynnRyder Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student General Artist
This is amazing. I love the ambiance in this piece.  
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